Feedback from my rough cut

I have had some feedback on my rough cut from a few people. This was a random sample of people that I had asked about my music video. The results were as follows-

Good Points
1. Shot lengths were on average very good and short enough so that the audience wouldn't get bored
2.The locations were very good and there was enough locations to provide a mixture
3. The audience liked the links to the genre, like the uses of green.
4. The audience liked the fact that there were uses of different colours like black and white and Sepia.

Ways to improve
1. Some of the timing in the lip sync was slightly out in the beginning and needs to be addressed.
2. Remove the black spot towards the end of the music video when the screen goes blank
3. Some of the shots used could be shortened slightly
4. Maybe another location could be added in from the original stating point.
5. When the 4 screens are on show with the face in the middle, the bars on the right hand edge of the screen needs to be edited out to match the left side.

Dated:18/1/14
Progress from the starting point
I had some people in my target audience look at my video and it was suggested that I would add in a new location. To achieve this I have added in a couple of scenes from a rock. This enabled a slight differentiation within locations, but it also kept to the genre of the music video and inline with all the other locations I had used.